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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 254
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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       Tell me what you can get out of this. There is some sense to it :D I'll give you a prize. I promise it's not hard, I know a few who'll undoubtedly hit it on the head.


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    Two shadows
    Parallel

    One tall and One small

    Four windows open in the corner of the world
    Two stand vertically and Two lie horizontally
    Displayed with the characteristics of

    A Lion
    He roars and the ocean turns on the ocean
    Yawns and the winds pass through smiling toothy grins
    of winter trees

    One window lets inside a moldy rain
    and sleeps like a bitter sister
    She breathes in and breathes out
    The Raven bows her head
    Lungs tied down with tarnish and dust; lively maggots and spider webs
    They all crawl from the cracks and crevices inside a house of pretense

    In the season of sick summer rain
    One shadow falls down

    Newborn light exposes the frames of glass
    burning sand melts into a turtle
    and the people all climb on his back
    They grow
    An organic pop-up book for this universe

    Some say the world covers more time than this
    That is: a different set of motions
    a different measurement of length, width and depth
    They propose that in some small hole
    Growing on a miniscule molecule
    Our last window is found

    Through it there is a story to be told
    There are pages and pages and pages to explain
    The how and the why of all things past
    Like she’s said before
    And all infinity fits inside a puzzle box

    All of life is composed of a Rubik’s cube or a fish








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      I'm doing this just after "The Monorail". I had to note that in that one you also write "Parallel" on its own line. Both are listed as type "Nature". So I further believe this and "The Monorail" to be related more to philosophy mixed with science.
    I will probably not be one of the people who will hit the idea of this on the head.

    I feel like I begin to understand, but then I doubt myself. Ultimately I'm clueless beyond what I know about you and your philosophy/science.

    So this will be a simple thought process.

    The fish in the last line is a reference (I believe) to your favored symbol/subject of the vesica piscis.

    I want to think this entire poem has something to do with string theory and your thought process on it. If string theory (superstring, m-theory) are possibly correct and thus what some hope it is, a theory of everything, then it could be said that all of life, the universe, all things could be explained with something simple.

    The vesica piscis is a symmetrical thing, you usually throw "symmetry" into your writing, this time you did so without actually typing it out, which is a positive.

    The shadows bit I'm at a loss on, same on the windows of the corner of the world. I want to guess that the windows deal with the mind of the speaker/author of the poem, but then I don't think it fits.

    I can find little of what the lion represents except stereotypical traits: pride, courage, ruler, sun (in astrology). Ruler and sun go together in some mythologies. Not sure though. The lion being able to roar or yawn and cause wide ranging things to happen suggests a master/controller. Though what exactly your getting at with it, I do not know.

    "moldy rain" is a confusing term to me. I think I can understand it, but I can not really see it. The reference to a bitter sister and the particular bird and my knowledge of your life suggests something personal, if correct, the windows being related to the author's mind may make more sense. If not, then I have no idea.

    "house of pretense" everyone in it is pretending. Again, if windows are to mind, the author is deluding itself. If not, then it refers to a situation that exists, but only exists due to lies from one or more parties involved. Or, if a more universal thing, there are some people who believe everything that exists are really just shadows created by things on the far reaches of our universe. I'm not sure if that's just some bothersome person I met or if it's a more wide-ranging belief (in science). I've not studied on it yet.

    The part where a shadow falls followed by newborn light I can read as a metaphor for a revelation, but I doubt that's it.
    Glass is melted sand (I say because you have "frames of glass/burning sand melts into a turtle), so either those two lines are definitely connected and the glass is becoming a turtle.
    People growing on the turtle's back as "an organic pop-up book for this universe" could be related to... I forget the culture now... the world turtle. Maybe not a culture at all. I know Discworld has the world turtle with the elephants on the back and I read "The Dark Tower" has something like that referenced.

    A lion (man-lion), a turtle, and a fish are all part of a Hindu epic (the name of which I do not recall). Perhaps you drew inspiration from Hinduism then. Perhaps just from a book you may be reading.

    The penultimate two stanzas (if we count single lines as stanzas) seem to go back toward a string theory/science-something thought process.
    Black holes have various theories and ideas around them (I guess that's what the "small hole/Growing on a miniscule molecule" is, though like most of this, I'm probably off).

    I don't know. These are just thoughts as that's what was asked and maybe this was useless. I wasn't too fond of this piece either way.
    | Posted on 2008-08-02 00:00:00 | by Sir Jimeth | [ Reply to This ]


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