Love lost by a Knife -------------------------------------------
I don't know what to do
I was about to tell you my
Deepest and darkest secret
I....I've cut myself
never hard enough to leave a scar
that way no one would know
but just as I'm going to tell you
you tell me,
that if I ever hurt myself
you would stop loving me.
Frozen with fear
I tell you that I would never
because its stupid.
Later on I just start to cry
so of course you ask me why
the guilt has gotten to me and i break down
and i tell you everything
but before you could say anything
I hang up the phone
I know what your going to say
or at least i do
either way you cant call back
its way to late
I know i hurt you
So i hope you forgive me on that
but as for loving me
I guess I'll never know
Wow, I actually felt scared, and I could feel the pain that was caused. I think it flows very well, organized and easy to read.
I don't see any way to improve it, besides, I beleive that the way that someone writes is perfect because it comes from their heart and theres no mistakes there.
So all in all, good work! :D
Submission Name: Love lost by a Knife
