III. The Battle Never Won by Crestfallenman

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Author:	Crestfallenman
ASL Info:	21/M/CA
Elite Ratio:	4.7 - 593/819/331
Words:	98

Class/Type:	Poetry/Serious
Total Views:	58
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Bytes:	585

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Again about my addictions. I believe I am at the peak, and ready to take the course of action.

III. The Battle Never Won dots

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If there could be of a place,
A place of retreat,
Would I be away from this addictive world.

If I could fight harder,
To win this battle I have lived in defeat,
Would I value more than I have valued.

If I had enjoyed sobriety before,
Could I ever do this again,
Because there are so many moments,
I would love to enjoy.

If I stepped up to the plate this time,
If I just shut the door to all these moments,
This battle I have never won,
Would turn to my greatest victory.

Submitted on 2008-07-27 21:59:21 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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I can relate with this because I myself suffered with addiction (this is a statement made in faith).

I know how it feels when you would like to be free but somehow are bound and you can stop but you do not understand why you cannot.

It is very deep for me because I do not just hear about it, I have been there.

Ah...forget the technicalities, this poem is deep. Thanks for sharing.

Much love,
God bless.
| Posted on 2008-08-26 00:00:00 | by nevender | [ Reply to This ]
awesome poem...dont have any complaints about it....i love the message behind it....im assuming that the battle that you speak of is life itself....keep writing....short simple but to the point
| Posted on 2008-07-28 00:00:00 | by Katrinagolden | [ Reply to This ]

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