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    dots Submission Name: Scars (or Sins)dots
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    Author: PryncessVynom
    ASL Info:    23/F/WV!!
    Elite Ratio:    3.35 - 1001/1073/242
    Words: 85
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 185
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 556



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       I wrote again! it makes me happy that i got this out, (also glad I only have one scar for the A sin)


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    dotsScars (or Sins)dots
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    You were right
    Boy I used to go to school with
    About searing the razor
    Before I touch it to my skin
    The pain is more
    and the scars are thin

    What I know now
    Is people disdain scars
    Marks of honor to me
    Are scarlet letter to them

    They cry adultery, gluttony and sloth
    They show my envy, lust and Pride
    The anger that couldn't stay inside

    Now theres nothing
    Blood trails and tears
    Left inside
    Boiled in fears.




    Submitted on 2008-07-28 10:24:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I wish u would have let this one openly closed.. which is why this just nailed me to a "T" love it!
    | Posted on 2008-07-29 00:00:00 | by SoftOrangeGlow | [ Reply to This ]


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