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    dots Submission Name: keep tryingdots
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    Author: brokenbylove
    ASL Info:    26/m/australia
    Elite Ratio:    1.27 - 63/298/259
    Words: 133
    Class/Type: Poetry/Broken
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    dotskeep tryingdots
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    why do i try
    cause every time some one else dies
    they all end on the ground gasping to breathe
    i try every time but i still suck the life out of them
    break their hearts right at the start
    why do i keep trying when it all ends up the same
    theres no one else to blame
    i started the flame and now ive got no life left to claim
    even though i dont mean it i still give out pain
    i just keep trying in vain
    im ment to be alone is all i can say
    maybe its those words that i need to speak
    so that i cant hurt anymore
    sure it will mean i will suffer pain
    but that wont matter as long as everyone else is safe...




    Submitted on 2008-07-28 11:04:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      lol.......same here.......
    | Posted on 2008-08-01 00:00:00 | by Blackphoenix14 | [ Reply to This ]
      Thats deep, and kinda dark. Very good though...
    | Posted on 2008-07-30 00:00:00 | by Killi | [ Reply to This ]


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