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    dots Submission Name: Lost Hopedots

    Author: webdevil
    Elite Ratio:    3.2 - 113/105/43
    Words: 79
    Class/Type: Poetry/Satire
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    dotsLost Hopedots

    They came they promised
    even the heavens marvelled
    as smiles came to all.

    They are here
    their promises
    even hell could not imagine.

    Sorrow deepens with the morrow
    laughter is on slaughter
    pain is mouthed as gain.

    They blame all
    yet the ants tend theirs
    still the sun remains.

    They sip exotic nectars
    the trodden drink puddles of stench
    the earth is puzzled.

    Dreams cease
    vision is no more
    and hope is lost.

    Submitted on 2008-07-28 13:13:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      That is a feeling of alone and derserted. Sounds kind of like a long lost survivor who finnaly gave up hope. I like the flow and the feelings it gave to me. I actualy felt alone all around and within my mind. As if never to be discovered again.
    | Posted on 2008-07-28 00:00:00 | by Evil Jesture | [ Reply to This ]

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