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    dots Submission Name: a Grain of Eternity!dots
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    Author: Joachim
    ASL Info:    71 Male RSA
    Elite Ratio:    5.55 - 139/107/74
    Words: 126
    Class/Type: Poetry/Romance
    Total Views: 88
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    Bytes: 763



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       Just a little of of me. Joachim


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    dotsa Grain of Eternity!dots
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    My Soul a Grain of Eternity!
    From a Grain of Sand to Endless Wastes
    My Soul is a Grain of Eternity cloaked in Obscurity
    Sharing the Agelessness of our Universe.
    At Peace!

    My desert is shaped by the Winds of my Soul
    This bareness this barrenness
    Contoured with gentle caress by Winds of Love
    Splendid in its Arraignment the Dune a grain of Sand
    Sealed by the 7 Rays of a Golden Dawn
    This Nomad is at Peace
    Blessed Be Eternity!

    To Heavens Peak we stretch caressing
    With Loving Gentle Touch to Reach
    The Heart of The Child who holds
    This Grain of Sand in His hand!
    The Blessing!
    My Soul is at Rest.
    Immortal!




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      i like the foreverness of this piece... the contentment and the peace that is to be found in every stanza...
    its kinda like a "ive run the race/fought the fight" contentment [not that im suggesting you are writing of your death or anything]

    i like the 'whole world in his hands' feel to this piece too... its just so secure in the knowledge of who you are and who you belong to no matter how small and insignificant and fleeting your existance seems to be "in the grand scheme of things"

    beautiful.
    | Posted on 2008-07-29 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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