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    dots Submission Name: Shared Lovedots
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    Author: realpoet
    Elite Ratio:    6.54 - 800/427/261
    Words: 175
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 52
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsShared Lovedots
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    in the month of March
    an angel came to her
    and said she was full of grace
    as words of joy came to her.

    One December night
    a cry did pierce the air,
    she named the baby Jesus
    as the angel said to do.

    She raised up her Child
    to save each one of us
    If each would come to know him
    as God the Merciful One.

    She raised up a Child
    and gave the child to me
    for me to walk beside Him
    to feel what sin does to me.

    As April dawned nigh
    she knew deep in her soul
    her Child had grievous burden
    ordained for Him to undergo.

    His blood dropped on her
    from his wounds on the cross,
    she offered her only Son
    to the Father Merciful.

    She sits now beside Him
    as Queen of His Heaven
    and tells us to love her Son
    who showed us the way to Him.




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      im not a fan of the title. salvific makes me think saliva and i know thats not what you want me to think but i think there could be a more simple, effective title to be found for this piece.


    i like the story you tell.
    i suck at putting god into words. mostly because my words always sound so hollow and trite. they always fall short.

    are you familiar with the gadfly on this site? his words are always very god oriented and powerful.

    anyways...
    apart from the whole "jesus prolly wasnt born in december/crucified in april" thought that had to appear in my mind your account is good.

    i remember seeing the passion of christ when it came out. i was at bible college and we all saw it and got talking about it and i said the thing that struck me was mary... realising that mel gibson is catholic and therefore the passion of christ was very catholic oriented... ive never stopped to think of how, as a mother, mary mustve felt.
    and you make me think of her again with the blood falling on her while her son was on the cross...

    im not quite sure about her being the queen of his heaven but thats quite possibly a personal/doctrinal thing that i shant go into any further as it isnt necessary.

    good work
    | Posted on 2008-07-29 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm glad you are writing about our amazing Lord, often we do not get the warmest welcomes for this kind of poetry, I find it hard to write myself, never hesitate because you think it won't be accepted.
    I like this one a lot, I think the fourth verse is my favorite.
    (There is a typo there though, you said, 'to se what sin does to me...' is it say or see or save? anyway very nice
    -dancer
    | Posted on 2008-07-28 00:00:00 | by dancer-of-words | [ Reply to This ]


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