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Allow ME to reminisce about the life I lead from the lip of the grave before I R.I.P and jump in just give in and let the current take me like a friend and I sin almost as much as I breathe but it only adds up if you take time to count so I red-line this bitch before the devil finds out that I'm sittin here, waitin here, wishin I could feel the fear take another breath let it out just another year |
"but it only adds up if you take time to count so I red-line this [censored] before the devil finds out" How about: "but it only adds up if you take time to count so I red-line this [censored] before the devil found out" Works better with the flow and context by changing "finds" to "found" Very well written, i felt everything. this was by the way my favorite stanza Brian | Posted on 2008-08-02 00:00:00 | by b_v_grant | [ Reply to This ] | very nice....that was deep "wishin I could feel the fear" i think I know exactly what you mean | | Posted on 2008-07-29 00:00:00 | by buryingthepast | [ Reply to This ] | the ending statement is [censored] amazing! | | Posted on 2008-07-29 00:00:00 | by SoftOrangeGlow | [ Reply to This ] | |