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    dots Submission Name: V. The Root To Your Problemsdots
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    Author: Crestfallenman
    ASL Info:    21/M/CA
    Elite Ratio:    4.7 - 593/819/331
    Words: 158
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsV. The Root To Your Problemsdots
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    Wonders across my head. The moment so silence, the mood so dark. The time so out of place, and the needs so virtually impossible.

    Everything comes to place. Everything is so noticeable now. Gamble with your love, and pay the piper. It is so easy to remember now. It is so easy to realise everything. Needing the safety, where is the safety.

    So lonely, so hard to look at the page before me. But there is no choice, it is a must.
    It is a must to move on, with the rest of your life. Without the fragrance of your essence, without the glitter in your gold, without the craving in your fever.

    It's hard to realise the holding onto that jem, is now locked in the past.

    Welcome to reality. This is far from a fairytale world. This is far from a story.

    Seize the moment,
    When you have it.




    Submitted on 2008-07-29 05:37:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this seems to me that it is about realizing what we have when it to late to hold onto it. it's gone and there's nothing we can do but realize we were stupid for taking for granted what deserved our love and attention. all I can say is that I like this...and unfortunately this is something that is true is everyone's life at least once, if we're lucky. Job well done!

    --Oli
    | Posted on 2008-07-29 00:00:00 | by Oli | [ Reply to This ]


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