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    dots Submission Name: Mistakes Will Always Be Madedots
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    Author: Robert Neville
    ASL Info:    16/m/London
    Elite Ratio:    0.48 - 10/192/232
    Words: 160
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 1254
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsMistakes Will Always Be Madedots
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    Mistakes, Mistakes, Mistakes, I'm full of them
    Its all I seem capable of
    And when I moved in for that kiss
    If you didnt recoil
    Maybe I wouldnt have missed
    Maybe I wouldnt have missed
    The Earth quakes, my body shakes, my heart aches
    That was just another mistake
    Mistakes will always be made

    Mistakes, Mistakes, I'm made of them
    Its all I've ever known
    but when I ran and missed the bus
    If only the driver saw
    There would be nothing to discuss
    There would be nothing to discuss
    The Earth quakes, my body shakes, my heart aches
    That was just another mistake
    Mistakes will always be made

    Its my own fault
    Its my own fault

    Mistakes, they circle me
    I cant let them go
    But when I turned into that alleyway
    And I became a statistic
    If i didnt miss that bus, If I got my kiss
    Well, what a way to end the day




    Submitted on 2008-07-29 14:50:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I liked the repitition of "mistakes"
    (wonder why?)
    its good.
    Im just a little confussed...
    So lets clear some things up..okay?
    "Mistakes, they circle me
    I cant let them go
    But when I turned into that alleyway
    And I became a statistic
    If i didnt miss that bus, If I got my kiss
    Well, what a way to end the day"
    what happened here?
    | Posted on 2008-09-11 00:00:00 | by GrIm:)ReApEr | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked.......seems as if you had some personal connections in there......but,overall, it was nice......kepp it up!
    | Posted on 2008-08-01 00:00:00 | by Blackphoenix14 | [ Reply to This ]


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