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    dots Submission Name: My Pathdots
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    Author: BrokenAngelKat
    ASL Info:    19-F-NC
    Elite Ratio:    1.66 - 102/231/188
    Words: 123
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 173
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    dotsMy Pathdots
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    I finally took a turn for me..
    Was it right?
    Was it wrong?

    With so many complications
    Come so many question.
    Did I make the right choice?

    I feel as if I left behind
    The one person who swore to stay.
    I hurt his feelings..
    And he walked away..

    Was it a test of loyalty?
    Did my issues of trust take him from me?
    My fear of distance..
    Of an unknown commitment?

    My heart may be sick..
    For he is lost..
    And I am gone..
    Left with nothing but a lonely song..

    And though my path is not of sorrow..
    Little joy comes from losing a friend..

    Or will our paths connect again..
    In the end?




    Submitted on 2008-07-29 15:32:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Anyone who leaves because of hurt feelings was not very committed to begin with...
    Try Jesus...lol (but Seriously, though...He sticks!)

    As for the poem, it conveys your feelings which I think that poetry is one of the greatest ways of expression...so great job with that
    and remember...you don't have to force a rhyme. Not all poems rhyme, and if they are captivating emotion, they really dont need to ;-)
    | Posted on 2008-07-29 00:00:00 | by iKnowWhoIAmNow | [ Reply to This ]


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