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    dots Submission Name: I need you to knowdots
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    Author: twistedchick
    ASL Info:    17/girlie/United Kingdom
    Elite Ratio:    1.89 - 14/39/52
    Words: 164
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 67
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 980



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    I need you to know I'm not threw the night
    I need you to know that I don't feel okay
    I need to know why I feel like I do
    I feel unbeautiful
    I feel worthless
    Shouldn't I know better?
    when I talk with you
    I find hope
    but after you hang up
    I just want to let go
    As you know
    I've made myself bleed
    But what you don't know
    is that lately
    I don't eat
    I won't sleep
    Am I killing myself?
    All I know
    is how I've changed my life
    but not in the right way
    I want to be with you at all times
    Cause its the only time I feel whole
    I love you more then just a boyfriend
    your my guardian angel
    I need you here
    I feel like I can eat with you
    I know I can sleep with you
    I know together we'll make it threw somehow
    I don't want to keep walking on alone




    Submitted on 2008-07-30 00:49:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this was okay it didnt seem to be one of those posts that after i read it i had no thoughts about it
    the stuff i like to read after i read it makes me think of something
    good write
    sandman
    | Posted on 2008-07-30 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]


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