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    dots Submission Name: fading slowlydots
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    Author: brokenbylove
    ASL Info:    20/m/australia
    Elite Ratio:    1.46 - 60/204/178
    Words: 131
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
    Total Views: 69
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 760



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    dotsfading slowlydots
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    ive become so jaded
    my mind is failing
    my thoughts are all of pain
    as i sit here head down in the rain
    on my knees with everyone deaf to my pleas
    i've become so faded
    not the person i used to be
    im hiding behind a mask
    everyone sees the smile
    no one realises it all a lie
    the pain that smile hides
    im living a life of denial
    the person you see is a fake
    just a face i use for my everyday
    when im alone at night
    the tears finally come
    the pain is let out
    im screaming, my mind in flames
    each day it gets harder
    each day im fading more
    i dont know who i am anymore
    im faded, jaded and lost...





    Submitted on 2008-07-30 06:58:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      you have put you're all in this piece. great write
    | Posted on 2008-07-30 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]


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