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    dots Submission Name: Daddy's Fallen Angeldots
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    Author: hybridsongwrite
    ASL Info:    20 / M / MN, USA
    Elite Ratio:    3.82 - 185/163/68
    Words: 222
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
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    dotsDaddy's Fallen Angeldots
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    V1
    I wish you could have met your mother
    I hope you'd have been like her too
    She had innocence the day i met her
    I'd like to think she'd have given that to you
    Though she had grown up fighting
    She always wound up on her feet
    I know you would have loved your mother
    It's too bad you didn't have the chance to meet

    C
    I loved you when you were inside the womb
    Now i hold you in my heart instead of my hands
    I walk around with this open wound
    I hold you in my heart instead of my hands

    V2
    I hope you would have loved your father
    I'd have done my absolute best
    I would have taught you about love and honor
    Virtues and living with respect
    I'd want you to be a light unto this world
    That seems like it's always so dark
    But fate dealt me it's cold, cold hand
    And it took away your beating heart

    I choke back a tear, i feel the regret
    I hang my head in shame, and see the cold sweat
    I pick up my head, i look at the cross
    Can't clear my mind cause i know the cost
    Who am I
    Who was I
    Who am I
    Who was I to play god




    Submitted on 2008-07-30 22:51:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is simply beautiful in its heart-rending openness and grief. This is so personal that it's hard to really be impartial to critique it. The only thing that I had a hard time with is the last line, because there is nothing else in the song that lets us know why you feel the guilt or what it's about. I realize that the line has a lot of meaning for you, but I just wasn't sure it's signifiance to the rest of the lyrics.

    jan
    | Posted on 2008-08-03 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]


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