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    dots Submission Name: truths untolddots

    Author: ladiesplanet1
    ASL Info:    23.cali baby
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 720/463/165
    Words: 300
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Alone
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       ill chang e the title later. any ideas for it??? thanks late

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    dotstruths untolddots

    give me a reason to believe
    that we could ever be so free
    and i could be lying in your arms
    free from all of the worlds harm
    and i could never tell my destiny
    but i know that you belong to me
    and i'll be here waiting for your touch
    a love that i know you want just as much

    how could i ever leave my past
    i cant thats why im taking on this task
    and im only leaving here for now
    but i know that ill be back somehow
    and still i will be waiting for the day
    when i can here all youve got to say
    all about our future and our lives
    this time could we try leavin out the knives

    how could you just leave me standing here
    now all alone im facing all myf ears
    im screaming from a memory so clear
    even though its been so many years
    and now im trying so hard not to die
    even though the world makes me cry
    you keep saying things will be alright
    but i feel im already losing sight
    is this the way its really meant to be
    with you a million miles lost to me
    when you were here i was so happy
    and now i dont know why we cant be free

    Im living out this nightmare
    with my own eyes
    im watching people die now
    but thats not why i cry
    and tears start streaming faster
    then turn to dust
    but i know i must be strong now
    and learn to trust

    You know i love you dearly
    with all my soul
    but things are getting darker
    and my hearts cold
    how long until i know
    this truths untold
    and every killing secret
    will soon unfold

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