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Breathe


Author: MurphyGirl44
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Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Breathe


Inhale
the stars above
the road below
naked beneath your plain white nightgown
naked beneath the galaxy's stare
close your eyes for a moment
you feel nothing
and everything
in one instant
a sense of losing everything
but the hope of finding it again
thoughts swirling through your mind
a breeze tugs at you
strings you along throughout time and space
heart first into a black hole we call life
it pushes you until you feel like...
you can't go on any longer
but you do, and you will
and that is when you can
exhale




Submitted on 2008-07-31 03:53:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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