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The Blank Stare

Author: 7makaveli
Elite Ratio:    3.33 - 36 /43 /50
Words: 89
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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This is...different

The Blank Stare

Eternally spotless, boundless space

The cold snowy stare, the white pale face

A canvas to be filled, but with what?

So transparent; you see through my thoughts

Controlling my words like the wave and a bird

Drowning out my voice, increasing the parts

On this page, the silent art

Shall overcome the artist's heart.......

Submitted on 2008-07-31 05:33:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  hey good writing i kinda didn't follow it but it flowed okay I guess but good writing keep at it

| Posted on 2008-08-01 00:00:00 | by anguished_child | [ Reply to This ]
  i dont know what you are writting about exactly but it still flows well.. execpt there are huge spaces... its poetry man, the words are the art... Not the spaces or the clever way you posted the write... i could just be biased. sorry to be rude but this is a site for constructive critisism.. liked the muse.
| Posted on 2008-08-01 00:00:00 | by snacky fish | [ Reply to This ]

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