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    dots Submission Name: Analisys of Daydreaming Born of Boredomdots
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    Author: KarloZ
    ASL Info:    21/male/california
    Elite Ratio:    2.38 - 5/5/18
    Words: 322
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 1234
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    Description:
       As youll see, and I explain, this is just parto f a rant that originated out of boredom and wonder. I dont know if it will be entertaining or even interesting, but I have limited time and its the shortest of my works that I could find.

    This writting is not finished.


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    dotsAnalisys of Daydreaming Born of Boredomdots
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    Its actually funny... the things that one comes to think amongst silence or boredom. Its like when these conditions arise, things in the phisical world must be subtle enough to get ones attention, in order to ignite something. And once you pick up on that one thing, that rises an unimaginable chain of thoughts. It unleashes the imagination into something that could be called a daydream.

    Now, the one thing that triggers this reaction cannot be subtle enough to be impossible to percept, it cannot be neutral. It must, in some level, be in either negative or positive interest to the person. The value of te object to the person will greatly influence the process, or daydream, as will the person's personality and inner fancies. If the reaction to the "trigger" is negative, then odds are that the trigger or something related to it will constitute an antagonist in the daydream, for the "dreamer" will almost always be the protagonist.

    This almost inconditional egocentric aproach is due to selfish human nature. However, I will not be getting into this subject because it would better fit a whole different article.

    In an attempt to organize ideas, I will break down what I have propossed thus far into different subjects. Who knows? Maybe this will end up being a book rather than an unfinished product of ephemeral boredom.

    The first "pieace" shall be what I have reffered to as the trigger. The trigger is simply that one thing that, in the midst of exterior inactivity, captures one's attention, even if one doesn't realise this...



    *what follows is a chain of examples in which I use myself as a subject. This, however, is not yet ready to be posted. Excuse any dissapointment and thank you for reading*




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      It's** Physical** >.< Okay, I'll stop with the nit-picking and just read it. Heh. Heh. Spelling...shmelling.


    Okay, first paragraph: Heck yes! Subtle enough to catch the attention. Leaving us with a mystery that we can wonder on. Something we can think about. Dream about. Oh, the power of daydreaming. So beautiful--so fleeting. Thoughtless and thoughtful. Plus, you just...use really pretty words. Heh.


    "order to ignite"


    Pretty. Sparks interest. Flames, dancing flames. See, you're doing exactly what you describe. Being subtle enough to spark interest. Allusively interesting. So the reader wants to read more. Very good introduction.


    And, moving on. Of course! Emotional response is fundamental to interest! Negative, positive...though, I must say, I think neutral...well, I disagree there. I've had daydreams about being a plate. I just like to think about things. It could be positive or negative. Then again, the fact that it interests me, could make something that seems neutral, not neutral...so... well, I walk in circles. /waves hand dismissively/


    Almost always the protaganist. I'm glad you put almost always. Being the antagonist can be a interesting outlook. xD And, as most of this site is made up of writers, it's important that we know how to live in any type of shoe. Or try to. Though, I suppose, almost always is accurate.


    Unconditional, dear. I know I said I wouldn't nit-pick. But that typo was very distracting to me. And distractions distract from the piece, and it is far too interesting a piece to be distracted from.


    If this were an essay, I would vote that you opted out that paragraph altogether or added it to the previous. As it is, I like it. Demonstrates the subtle interest again.


    Ephemeral? Oh dear! A word I don't know! I both love and hate finding those while reading. xD But, I can use context clues of course. And, now that I have, I've discovered it is a word I know. I just didn't recognize the spelling. I don't believe I've ever written it.


    ... Oh, asteriks, how I loathe you!


    Thanks for sharing. <3
    | Posted on 2010-03-15 00:00:00 | by SweetAndOhSoME | [ Reply to This ]
      No disappointment here, Kar. Shock and awe actually. Never really thought of things that way. Very interesting.
    | Posted on 2009-11-23 00:00:00 | by Mythica | [ Reply to This ]


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