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    dots Submission Name: Binds of Feardots
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    Author: Porcelaine
    ASL Info:    27/F/Croatia
    Elite Ratio:    3.9 - 880/703/256
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsBinds of Feardots
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    ~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~

    They found me empty-eyed
    Facing disaster and silver nitrate ponds
    On the land of the miracle makers
    And slaves

    They found me with my hands tied
    Forced to fracture under scrutiny of fallen feathers,
    Cheerful demons and gasping breezes
    On thin air

    They found me straying
    Away from the copper taste of nothingness,
    The exhilaration of weakness
    And low-whispered conspiracies

    I am as they found me
    An icicle restrained with madness,
    The new child to an oblivion mother,
    And I breathe now�more and more�only fear

    ~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~




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      Oh my! This is so sad and sinister, but brilliantly written! One gets the feeling of resigned grief and hopelessness, and the poem conveys powerful emotion! Well done, lovely lady!
    | Posted on 2008-08-04 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      wow
    that really deep and serious
    all I can say is that I like it and not to let the things of this world get you to much down b/c I was like that then one i was like f this so I stop leting things get me down that much

    but anyways great writing keep at it


    ~Darrell
    | Posted on 2008-08-01 00:00:00 | by anguished_child | [ Reply to This ]


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