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    dots Submission Name: Buttercupdots
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    Author: AeThe Lost Poet
    ASL Info:    19/M/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 147/184/122
    Words: 123
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsButtercupdots
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    You don't use commas
    when you write back to me
    so-- there's no pause in thought,
    like it's right back to me,
    some times it just hurts
    like a knife slash through me,
    am I so disposable?
    Is it like that, truly?
    Am I so opposable?
    Or despite that-- you see,
    something inside of me,
    that you fight that-- feud me?
    And then decide that, use me
    til' I"m used up to my fill.
    Butter me up,
    Buttercup spruced up with pills
    yeah... sure...
    first acknowledgement is tolerant,
    but he doesn't care, just as long,
    as you follow him...

    But not me, I'm for real,
    when I say that it's not right,
    I know-- I put up fašades,
    but not tonight...




    Submitted on 2008-07-31 17:31:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I like it,
    Especially 'butter me up buttercup...." I'm probably reading that with the wrong pauses, but it reminds me of a song.
    I also like that you put the right kind of š in fašade, you don't see that much. surpised me a little,
    11th line from the bottom I'm has a double quotation mark in it. no big deal just being anal. lol
    Vynom
    | Posted on 2008-08-02 00:00:00 | by PryncessVynom | [ Reply to This ]


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