I just have a couple things though:
- it starts out repetitive with "I love the way..." but stops after 2 repetitions, reasons? I like how it's worded and everything but, just thought it was interesting...
-Also, the rhyme scheme altars. Like in the beginning you don't really have one without the repetition but then it starts at the second verse...?
Those are just my thoughts. I really do love this piece and I wish everyone had that kin of love.
WOW!!! You have mesmerized me. This piece is so great. I think that every little word that you put in this poem shows how much love there can be in life and not everything is bad and somethings can actually be good. You have inspired me to write a love poem that isn't sad.
i like this peace for a few reasons these days it is very hard to write a good "love" poem.but you have succeded in that,also i can tell that these words come form ur heart which is also an added bonus. since im not really that good at love poems myself...... all n all this is a wonderfully written peace
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