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    dots Submission Name: Fantasy.dots
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    Author: CourtneyLynne
    ASL Info:    17/female/Washington
    Elite Ratio:    4.99 - 47/51/43
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Poetry/Romance
    Total Views: 75
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    dotsFantasy.dots
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    Fire coursing through veins
    rosy red and all consuming-
    how the heat can stir us up.
    the desire to taste, the need to touch
    burning in our eyes, our words
    through waves of passion
    each cresting and crashing through-
    white hot pokers dancing on skin.
    never before, but again we
    taste the perfected heaven that
    is as evident as ripened cherries
    on the lips of one another.
    casted golded masks melted-
    left underneath, a diamond crusted
    romance, left for the world to see.
    Our hands, carved to fit,
    clasped in perfect harmony.




    Submitted on 2008-08-01 05:32:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The short, sweet conformity of this is what gives it such a silk feel. I read it a few times over, from start to finish, and it just slyly cascaded from line to line with so much sensual order, like a bullet train with 1 destination. I just happen to be gifted with knowing what that destination is. Either way its another example of how your poetic style has evolved. You use rhyme to compliment the poems natural form, rather than to control or dominate it. You let the rhyme enhance, rather than bend it to fit into a rhyme. It makes me grin everytime I read it, for multiple reasons.
    | Posted on 2008-08-02 00:00:00 | by Passionbyapathy | [ Reply to This ]


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