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    dots Submission Name: BLocKeDdots
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    Author: Celeste J. Bell
    ASL Info:    21/Lady/never-never land
    Elite Ratio:    4.01 - 209/206/67
    Words: 162
    Class/Type: Poetry/Satire
    Total Views: 51
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1003



    Description:
       hello again, writer's block. so nice of you to shit on my good ideas.


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    dotsBLocKeDdots
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    I placed the pen to my heart, but it did not write.
    I smudged the dust to see through my crooked sight,
    all unyielding
    all letting me down.

    I placed the pen to my notebook but could not tell
    Whether I'd end up in Heaven or just burning in Hell
    completely forsaken
    completely mistaken.

    I force the words out through thin white lips
    But I know that nothing will ever come of it
    such a waste of time
    such a waste of mine.

    Blocked inside are the rhymes and the hymns
    And I'd give my life to make the ink flow again
    so tempting
    so beyond my control.

    Even this goes unfinished as well
    I tell you friends my muse must be burning in Hell
    She's so far gone
    She's so undone.

    You can smile at this all that you want
    But to me its all an agonizing taunt
    Such bullshit
    Such a waste of your time.




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    ||| Comments |||
      I like the first two lines in each stanza. It could have an effect added to it of why the writer cannot write, such as pain from a certain someone, or something plaguing their mind. With a good hook, you could turn that into a very, very good song. Not just good. but very, very good.
    | Posted on 2008-08-02 00:00:00 | by hybridsongwrite | [ Reply to This ]



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