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    dots Submission Name: Space Odyssey: Crumbling Puzzledots
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    Author: Black Angel
    ASL Info:    15/F/Tx
    Elite Ratio:    1.99 - 12/75/68
    Words: 371
    Class/Type: Story/Serious
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    dotsSpace Odyssey: Crumbling Puzzledots
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    During the 2000's people became aware of the effects they were having on Earth. People tried to stop and fix it, but there were to many people who didn’t care so in the end, nothing really happened and the movement ended. But what no one knew was that would be a costly mistake. The years went on and everything got progressively worse and worse. Jobs were lost, people were thrown out onto the street, eating what ever there was. The world was covered in a smog. Children had never seen the sky, but all felt the burn of the acid rain. It was hell on Earth. But what no one knew what that there were creatures out side of Earth watching the down fall. These creatures were supposed to make sure every life on every spec of the universe served their purpose. They have hade their eyes on Earth for awhile, not sure what the people of Earth were doing; what was going on. By the year 5782 it was coming to an end. About 200 fighters were chosen, along with the 50 top scientist, and top 60 technicians to live in a special built city to try to save as much as they could, and make everything better. They weren’t aloud back on the outside of this city. (Think of the city kinda like the city in “the Giver” which is a book) Everything on the outside is sickly, filled with disease, whores, homeless, and criminals. (Think the movie freejack) Those creature who were looking over the Earth have came to a decision to destroy Earth, for it has became useless, but as Earth got word of this, scientist found out something horrific. To destroy the Earth, you destroy the whole universe. Now at first it didn’t make sense, until they figured out that the whole universe was a puzzle. You couldn’t destroy any part of the universe when it wasn’t ready, because if you did the whole universe would crumble. But those creatures who are trying to destroy Earth don’t want to listen to them, so how those in the Safe City, as it’s called, must fight to save Earth, against those creatures that are supposed to keep order.




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