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    dots Submission Name: Different Colorsdots
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    Author: dancer-of-words
    Elite Ratio:    4.91 - 120/86/41
    Words: 96
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 60
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       I think I'm orange.

    (classified longing because I miss school, haha, isn't that funny? :)


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    dotsDifferent Colorsdots
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    Flashes of yellow
    glimpses of green
    a muddle of students
    tromping in
    different colored raincoats,
    red, yellow, green.

    Squeak-squeak, scuffle, screech
    sneakers and plastic boots
    on wet floors scuffling
    to classrooms.

    Flashes of white,
    glimpses of brown,
    a subtle mix of race
    and skin.
    different colored faces
    and races, white, brown, black.

    Pitter-patter, drum, tat
    rain falling on gray pavement
    everybody walks quickly
    clutching books

    Flashes of frowns,
    glimpses of grins
    a puddle of colors
    different colored people, feelings
    gray, orange, purple.

    I'm a color, too...
    which one are you?




    Submitted on 2008-08-01 22:18:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I really loved the imagery you get from your choice of words. This whole poems is like a rainbow, all the colours, the happiness you feel when you see it after the rain.

    I always miss school during the summer and hate it when I finally go back.

    Your poem reminds me of elementary school kids in grade 2 or 3. Still eager and excited to be in school, still young enough to enjoy simple pleasures of something like a rainfall.

    The use of sound words also really help to emphasize the overall feel of the poem and allowed you to believe for just a moment that you were actually there, taking it all in.

    All in all, I loved this poem.

    As for my colour, I think I'd be a green. earthly relaxing tone with a bit of a spark. lol
    | Posted on 2008-11-12 00:00:00 | by jaramae | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow! This is amazing! It's like a waterfall of words, flowing in perfect unison with each other, while creating a rushing, powerful sound. The word choice is excellent, yet simple. I really love this, reminds me of Silverstein stuff. Keep up the work man!

    Take it easy!!
    CD

    PS:
    I'm green? hahahah I dunno.
    | Posted on 2008-08-02 00:00:00 | by Sirbongatron | [ Reply to This ]


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