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    dots Submission Name: The Angel & The Vampiredots
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    Author: Fallyn Angel
    ASL Info:    19/F/CT
    Elite Ratio:    3.21 - 44/54/47
    Words: 515
    Class/Type: Story/Depressed
    Total Views: 87
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 2748



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       I was inspired by my ex-fiancee.. he's a dumbass and deserves to die.


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    dotsThe Angel & The Vampiredots
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    Once upon a time, there was a beautiful angel named Fallyn. She was beautiful beyond words. She had lucious, long, curly blonde hair. She was God's favorite angel. She was sent from Heaven to watch over a special person or well creature.

    Shiosuke was a vampire but a confused one at that. He had no one to care for him or even talk to. He was a loner. He wore dark clothes and always stayed in the dark. He never came out of his home. Not even to hunt.

    Fallyn came upon his house and watched over him from outside. She wasn't sure what she was going to do. She knocked on the door smiling, hoping that she could make him smile. He came to the door and opened it. His eyes met her eyes and he fell in love. He thought her eyes were as blue as the ocean and even as deep as them.

    She walked inside smiling and noticed he couldn't keep his eyes off of her. She giggled some not saying a word. She was there to gaurd, not to converse. She sat on his bed smiling to him.

    "I'm Shiosuke." He had spoken to her with a smile on his face. The first of many.

    "I am Fallyn." She bowed her head smiling and slightly blushing, but he was cute so who wouldn't blush at the sight of him.

    She stood up and walked around looking at him. To her surprise and came in and kissed her lips. She pulled back unaware of what to do. She had never had that happen to her. She then went back to him and kissed him back. They had fallen in love.

    A few months passed and they are still in love. He's engaged to her and would never want to lose her in anyway. It's like God knew they were meant for each other.

    One night, when Shiosuke was out of the house, a guy came in. She was tempted by the Devil and something she never wanted to happen, happened. She had no control. She was vulnerable and upset. Shiosuke and herself had a big fight which is why he wasn't there.

    Shiosuke came back and found them in his bed. He was shocked and couldn't handle it. He tried but it kept eating away at him. For a few weeks he tried to forget but it wasn't happening. He broke off the engagement and broke up with her. It was over and he wanted nothing to do with her.

    Fallyn still loved him and promised him it would never stop. She ran away and went back to God. He sent her down to Hell.

    She fell to the ground and was tortured. The Devil favored her the most so he spared her the torture. All she had to do was marry him and be his wife for all of eternity. She agreed. Tonight she dined with the Devil. Tomorrow she was to be the bride of the Devil.




    Submitted on 2008-08-01 23:09:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Oh my this is amazing! I love it so much!!! Wow you should write a book!!!
    | Posted on 2008-11-13 00:00:00 | by Alegra | [ Reply to This ]
      i love you jill your right i wont ever let you go oh and i love this story it was great i enjoyed it love you keep writeing
    | Posted on 2008-08-02 00:00:00 | by shiosuke | [ Reply to This ]


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