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    dots Submission Name: Christines' Spiderdots
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    Author: PryncessVynom
    ASL Info:    23/F/WV!!
    Elite Ratio:    3.35 - 1001/1073/242
    Words: 44
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 153
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 328



    Description:
       Was supposed to be longer, but i was writing at work and got a slew of alarms and got distracted, now I know that this will grace the Archives of my forgotten writings, never to be finished and never to be read again.

    Christine shot herself, thats what it was gonna end with, but I lost it


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    dotsChristines' Spiderdots
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    A big bellied spider skitteres across the screen,
    Black and red
    Fangs dripping death,
    Trailing pristine strings of glass
    Coviering the Last Words from Christines past
    Daintily stepping over,
    Crimson trails of blood
    Wondering whether to give up
    This dark yet sparkly home.




    Submitted on 2008-08-02 06:39:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This poem was EVERYWHERE. You shouldn't just set it aside and forget about it, maybe give it a second look.

    ~Carrie
    | Posted on 2008-08-02 00:00:00 | by dismal_s child | [ Reply to This ]


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