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    dots Submission Name: Overdosed...dots
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    Author: PryncessVynom
    ASL Info:    23/F/WV!!
    Elite Ratio:    3.35 - 1001/1073/242
    Words: 182
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 170
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1072



    Description:
       Ok I want to say this is a rewrite of an earlier write. SOmone had commented on the other one and I don't think that they understood the manner of his overdose. So I thought I'd put a little more detail in it Please comment on what you think, I would like help to correct anything that doesn't sound right, so please let me know!


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    dotsOverdosed...dots
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    I just wanted to say that,
    I love you...

    And I'm not afraid.
    Really I'm not.

    Never again shall I fear
    What we are,
    or what we will be.

    When I found you
    Not alone,
    So very un-alone.
    And stoned.

    I. found. you. stoned!
    The way you promised me
    You would never again be!

    I felt a storm, brewing....
    boiling....
    Exploding.
    And when I next awoke
    I felt encased in ice.....
    Numb....
    Empty.


    They said you Overdosed.
    But I know that,
    you were fine before me,
    Fine enough to straddle that whore again.
    I just slipped a little more,
    A little extra something,
    Into your fine little mix.
    And then snuck out the door, and
    Now you're dead
    And I'll never
    be caught.
    Cause I hid my tracks,
    (though seems you didn't do quite so well)




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      Wow. Which one is the original write? Is this as [censored]ed up as I'm interpreting it? Regardless, I like the piece. It as a feeling of cold caring, if that makes any sense. Kinda like, "I love you but I don't care?"
    | Posted on 2009-07-30 00:00:00 | by MyWorld | [ Reply to This ]


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