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    dots Submission Name: pirated basketsdots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 154
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotspirated basketsdots
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    your familiar suns
    are showing again.
    could we just
    get a few understandings
    out of the way
    before the misunderstandings
    get in the way.
    i am not here to fuck you,
    over-indulgence
    is often disporportional.

    there's always this momentary collapse
    of reason when remembering
    what it is
    to trust something
    that has never proven itself
    trustworthy.

    may i have your attention
    through the turn-about,
    my reasoning is not circular.
    i'm seeking a straight line
    from your heart to mine
    where two friends collect themselves
    in pirated baskets.

    i'm finished
    with romantic holocausts.
    don't get me wrong,
    get me right.

    so this is about precision,
    where two interests
    have the opportunity
    to assert unity...
    possibly.
    that is to say,
    there's a possibility.
    we'll see what happens
    when intent is tested
    past interest.

    there's something happening,
    otherwise..
    we wouldn't be here.




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      I imagine you as someone who loves, not necessarily anyone special but as a river overflowing . So this title intrigues me. It's
    as if someone you care about is lending little trust to your emotions.

    I also get the idea that there are many souls in your life that move
    past you without a shred of attachment.

    And that isn't you, really. You dance with the higher planes of reality and believe all if it matters. Especially how we act when
    souls seem to find unison and rhythm.

    I see in this that you have no intention of robbing that what you have to give is genuine. And that is not opinion, it's just what I feel from this piece. Bravo, and I see many more to read.

    Nan
    | Posted on 2008-08-14 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]


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