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    dots Submission Name: misplaced paradisesdots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 351
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsmisplaced paradisesdots
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    clever thought,
    how dawns might sparkle
    towards your glistering splendor,
    to be held there
    in mercy's tender grasp
    where you were formed,
    these ghosts
    & pale creatures
    that we've endured
    in knowing.
    they eat their way into us
    while we live.

    i hold out
    my olive skins
    in gentle motions
    towards your broken heart
    as those busted birds
    you let loose,
    misplace paradises
    into my dreams
    each night.

    i form pictures
    with my hands
    in the darkness
    of my days
    to remind me
    of your existence.
    i wish to replace
    my own doubt
    with the ever
    abundant always
    of your infinite grace
    becoming...

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    you take the hallway, ill take the highway


    can you let go of the hook
    that fished you
    from the open air
    into that watery grave
    of memory lake?

    will someones elses history
    once again
    delete me?

    what do people
    wait for from the past?
    as if it could walk right up
    into the bluish part of your life
    & say "take me,
    i wish to renew you."
    besides it's ghosts
    that haunt you,
    it is gone.

    unless you take time
    for what time really is.

    yes,
    it's still happening,
    but is that still you?
    are you still
    trailing the footsteps
    of some illusion
    that was never really real?

    i am here
    amongst the water
    of everything
    & i am breathing.
    i am not a figment,
    i am form.
    listen
    to my tangible
    heart-strings
    as they vibrate for you
    in the dark.

    i know this story,
    it's been spoken
    in my sleep
    & in my dreams
    since youth.
    it tells me
    that we should
    untie these earthly binds
    & unblindly move
    towards truth.

    you take the hallway
    & i'll take the highway.
    i see it like this;
    at least
    we're finally going somewhere...





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