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    dots Submission Name: proof of my existencedots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 186
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsproof of my existencedots
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    believe from the inside
    where it counts.
    i've been counting the seconds
    as much as they've been counting me.
    they seem to linger,
    from toe to finger
    through my days.

    if you have a handful
    of everything,
    what are you left with
    when the storm comes?
    a compromise,
    a ship of gold
    or an aching memory?

    i've tested the limits
    of my affection
    in so far as i've tried,
    but have yet to find
    their boundries
    in this life.
    i give you
    all these new moons
    as proof of my existence.

    if we are to create
    a new world
    in our own image,
    must we cut away
    the parts that gather
    to delete us?
    or do those,
    like all of our miracles
    of goodness,
    make us who we were
    when we were wishing to be
    who we are?

    there is an island
    in my heart
    that i am becoming
    with every breath.
    & the tao,
    a thundering bump
    inside me,
    calls out
    to your eccentric company.

    while i'm still breathing,
    show me that you really care...




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