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    dots Submission Name: What It Wasdots

    Author: Fallyn Angel
    Elite Ratio:    2.79 - 44/69/91
    Words: 79
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsWhat It Wasdots

    Pigtails and miniskirts.
    School girl outfit.
    Dress up.

    Long walks on the beach.
    Wind lifts your hair.
    Sand between your toes.

    Long nights.
    Long hours.
    Time spent together.

    Truth escapes.
    Lies are told.
    Secrets are held.

    Love consumated.
    Love endured.
    Love erased.

    Hands held.
    Lips touch.
    I love you heard.

    Whispers in the night.
    Knocking on the door.
    Phone calls.

    Love lost.
    Love gone.

    Submitted on 2008-08-03 17:14:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this piece a lot, I think mainly because I can relate to it. To me this is a poem of young love, head over heals slowly rolling downhill until it breaks apart. It's sad, but as we all know somethings must come to an end. Over all you did a great job on this, i like the wording and the imagery it creates. Very good work, and I hope to read more soon!

    | Posted on 2008-08-04 00:00:00 | by my_worst_fear85 | [ Reply to This ]

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