Chrystine
This write again reminded me just why I have always been so fond of your poetry
You speak such truth in this one
There is a rhythem and a beat that is always everlasting in this world
I like to thimnk of it like this
One can never achieve pure silence in this world because their is always some sound for one to hear be it something as simple as the sound of our fingers typing out a new write
How are things going in California
Im glad to see you back posting
I missed you
God Bless
Ron
Please keep in touch !!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I love the lines "I have a drum
boom-ba-dum " because they seemed so innocent, whereas every line after it was so spiritual and eloquant, but it resonated with the same innocence you started with. I loved them, because I could almost see you as a little child beating your drum with a smile on your face, and then you currently, with a smile on your face, but your eyes are closed because you're connecting with the Divine as you're playing. It's a really powerful line also, because it sort of has that warrior sense to it, too, that it's such a powerful and proud statement, like someone who got their own sword. It's powerful.
A few things before I add this to my faves.
"A blanket wrapping divided souls
in elegance, solace and warmth"
There should be a comma after solace, or at least that's how it reads to me, there's a breath pause there for me, and it's not written in it.
"A pebble plopped into a pond
and resonating circle ripples "
Also, I think it's "a resonating circle ripples" or maybe "resonating circles ripple"
Yea, that's pretty much it for me, now this is going to be on my faves list.
~Azura*
Submission Name: I Have a Drum
