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I Have a Drum


Author: beatthedrum
ASL Info:    55- F - Southern CA USA
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I Have a Drum



I have a drum
boom-ba-dum

While playing I perceive
the heartbeat of the world

I have a drum
boom-ba-dum

And in that space all people
are equal in speech and song

I have a drum
boom-ba-dum

Where sonic strands weave into
a gossamer and satin sound

I have a drum
boom-ba-dum

A blanket wrapping divided souls
in elegance, solace and warmth

I have a drum
boom-ba-dum

A pebble plopped into a pond
and resonating circle ripples

I have a drum
boom-ba-dum

Where rebels against hate
and bureaucracy congregate

I have a drum
boom-ba-dum

Making waves that touch
things beyond my myopia

I have a drum
boom-ba-dum

A space for love as metaphor
the rhythm of throbbing hearts

I have a drum






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  Chrystine
This write again reminded me just why I have always been so fond of your poetry
You speak such truth in this one
There is a rhythem and a beat that is always everlasting in this world
I like to thimnk of it like this
One can never achieve pure silence in this world because their is always some sound for one to hear be it something as simple as the sound of our fingers typing out a new write
How are things going in California
Im glad to see you back posting
I missed you
God Bless
Ron
Please keep in touch !!!!!!!!!!!!!!
| Posted on 2008-08-13 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
  I love the lines "I have a drum
boom-ba-dum " because they seemed so innocent, whereas every line after it was so spiritual and eloquant, but it resonated with the same innocence you started with. I loved them, because I could almost see you as a little child beating your drum with a smile on your face, and then you currently, with a smile on your face, but your eyes are closed because you're connecting with the Divine as you're playing. It's a really powerful line also, because it sort of has that warrior sense to it, too, that it's such a powerful and proud statement, like someone who got their own sword. It's powerful.

A few things before I add this to my faves.
"A blanket wrapping divided souls
in elegance, solace and warmth"

There should be a comma after solace, or at least that's how it reads to me, there's a breath pause there for me, and it's not written in it.

"A pebble plopped into a pond
and resonating circle ripples "

Also, I think it's "a resonating circle ripples" or maybe "resonating circles ripple"

Yea, that's pretty much it for me, now this is going to be on my faves list.
~Azura*
| Posted on 2008-08-04 00:00:00 | by EmpathicAya | [ Reply to This ]


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