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    dots Submission Name: no sun splits in infinite smilingdots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 146
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsno sun splits in infinite smilingdots
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    there's these,
    & i have hands to show
    for them
    & sea creatures
    that would rather suicide
    than take a dive.

    i've been memorizing
    the movement of flowers,
    the way one seems
    to cataglott
    to the others
    its blissful pollen.

    this process
    seems subtle
    yet spans vast distances.
    take green for instance,
    my equally naked heart
    & how no sun
    splits in infinite smiling.

    are we just visitors here
    with pearls
    to curl
    into various shelvings?
    or is memory perfect
    & more terrible than air?
    i toss stones
    into your trembling waters
    waiting for the questions
    to appear.

    i gave up on answers
    after i saw your blue discs
    for seeing
    staring back at me.
    they seem to explain everything
    in their depths
    of reeling wonders.
    the possibilities
    prepare me
    for the impossible truth
    of knowing...




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