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    dots Submission Name: I WHISPER HIS NAMEdots
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    Author: Inducted_Kitty
    Elite Ratio:    4.3 - 307/422/109
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       For Jeremy, whom I love and miss more each passing day.


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    dotsI WHISPER HIS NAMEdots
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    I whisper his name, in the early morn’s dawn
    As the bird’s sing their first melody.
    I whisper his name, in the shadows of night
    And I treasure his sweet memory.

    He makes himself known, in the whispering wind,
    In the twinkle of each wondrous star.
    And, he whispers my name, in his comforting way
    As he sends me his love, from afar.

    The depth of his love takes the breath out of me
    And, I thank him for comforting me,
    So, I whisper his name, with the greatest respect
    Of my son ~ of my Jeremy…




    Submitted on 2008-08-03 23:23:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is beautiful...

    its wonderful the way you find ways to see him in every day life even though he isnt physically with you any more.


    this seems to me to be a personalised psalm 23 for your son... like substitute the lord for jeremy and you have a beautiful " you are with me" piece...

    i wish i could say more
    im glad you are still writing about him and allowing yourself to feel both his presence and his absence.

    take care
    | Posted on 2008-08-04 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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