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    dots Submission Name: Thank you for the Memories dots
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    Author: nephthys
    ASL Info:    17/F/U.S.A
    Elite Ratio:    2.85 - 10/6/6
    Words: 220
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 809
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    Description:
       This is longer than what i usually write and I'm sure a little more work wouldn't hurt. but i hope you like it anyway


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    dotsThank you for the Memories dots
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    Radio blaring,
    an old song comes on,
    memories flood back like a tidal wave.

    The first meeting,
    I wondered who you were,
    wondered how I could not know you,
    we live in such a small town.
    You wanted me, that was plain.
    Couldn’t keep your eyes off me.
    I did my best to ignore you.

    I resisted for weeks, unsure.
    You were relentless,
    and in the end I gave into temptation.

    The first kiss, earth shattering.
    I wanted more, so did you.
    What I night of passion that was.
    I never wanted you to go.

    Countless stolen moments,
    we couldn’t get enough of each other.
    Couldn’t seem to make it to a bed either.
    Oh well, beds are overrated.
    Couches and counter tops are much more fun.

    And then one day it was gone.
    We stopped talking.
    It was as if someone had flipped a switch.
    The feelings were gone, as if they had never existed.

    Sometimes I miss your company,
    but most of the time I am content with how things are.
    I would like to thank you though,
    for caring, for the passion, for just being you, and most of all, for the memories.

    Thank you for the memories.




    Submitted on 2008-08-04 03:03:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Another good piece...It is awesome how you can savor the memories even though they are gone. It's rare to move on without some kind of bitterness. You really have a way of expressing yourself through words.
    | Posted on 2008-08-06 00:00:00 | by iKnowWhoIAmNow | [ Reply to This ]


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