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    dots Submission Name: Advising Vicedots
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    Author: BlazeFlamme
    ASL Info:    22/m/TX
    Elite Ratio:    1.81 - 23/160/138
    Words: 166
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsAdvising Vicedots
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    Your jokes are dry
    Your words lack tact
    Your imposing views
    Contain no fact

    Your expressions vague
    Yet your lies are stealth
    Your world isn't special
    Only masked with wealth

    You shrug off every cringe
    You evade each chill
    Your mistakes don't seem fatal
    But your heart will still

    You may have no regret
    Go on and give yourself the slip
    Who are you convincing?
    Watch your pace, don't want to trip

    Do you really think you can handle
    The weight you've put on top?
    Lifting is the easy part
    You sure your legs won't stop?

    Your steps will become weakened
    The position you're in is strange
    But if you could turn back the clock
    Really, what could you change?

    I say don't regret
    I say never look back
    I say find your place
    And run while you're intact

    Maybe it'll be familiar
    Maybe it's something fresh
    You won't know until you reach it
    No time to second guess




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