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Author:	saartha
ASL Info:	20/F/US
Elite Ratio:	4.52 - 172/247/87
Words:	59

Class/Type:	Poetry/Misc
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Anathema dots

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Man has dreamt
the end of the world
since the beginning.
Zeus staying faithful,
Heracles laying down
his labors,

crying aloud: enough
is too much, I can't
do this anymore.

And we speak of language
like the doppelganger
of mind-and-soul,
as though changing tongues
changes your heart, too--

as though changing subjects
banishes regret.

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  "as though changing subjects
banishes regret."

Now that's an ending. Those lines speak volumes for me, in their own simplicity. You really have some awesome talent. I hope you don't mind that your getting so many comments from me.
| Posted on 2008-11-21 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
  Well, it's always adventurous to live outside of one's self. Perhaps a find of a gemmous other endeavor is the thing that jolts the being into activity. We,as humans , live in a world of anathemas then on occassion enter those doors to find that only truth needs no anathemas.
| Posted on 2008-08-28 00:00:00 | by realpoet | [ Reply to This ]

There's this sense of "...and now we're here, and we wonder - what is over there?" and then it continues, naturally -

to if and but and yet.

Day dreaming of things changing on epic scales because every mortal knows their spec like nature on the table cloth of the universe.

As ants at a picnic - so they ponder : "will I ever be part of something epic?"

And truly what bests cataclysm, the failing of an entire planet, at being the most grandiose?

So we dream of the end, since, likely, even before the beginning.

Heracles has always been overworked and under-appreciated.

Those tongue changing chameleons are a bunch of [censored]s...warping words to make up for their own pathetic spines.

They alter tones and dabble in stitching syllables together to try and...well, to try and change hearts because they lack the conviction to stand straight and brave.

Changing subjects does not banish regret - but it does allow the glossing and the sweeping of subjects away and under rugs.

The chicanery and kiss kiss superficial is as ancient as Zeus.

I find it ironic you call him faithful.

| Posted on 2008-08-10 00:00:00 | by Fizzlethorpe | [ Reply to This ]
  as though changing subjects banishes regret

powerful idea right there and i am all for changing subjects if that were the case
but it isnt.
if the regret were true and deep then it transcends both subject and change...

i also like that enough is too much... like its more than enough... ive felt this way a lot lately but been unable to find a way of expressing it which didnt sound neurotic or whinging... enough is too much is the cry ive been looking for...

as always i appreciate your use of mythology in your work... you always bring them in so subtly and yet they have such power and bring new dimensions to your imagery and piece as a whole. i am quite jealous. it makes me want to get to know them better so i can casually throw them into my daily speech like you seem to be able to

this is a stunning piece.
yes. it is.
| Posted on 2008-08-05 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]

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