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    dots Submission Name: Brain surfingdots
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    Author: Ghetto_King
    ASL Info:    19 m ft. lauderdale
    Elite Ratio:    0.76 - 4/33/54
    Words: 214
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
    Total Views: 921
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1184



    Description:
       just brain surfing


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    Brain Surfing
    As I sit in the wee hours of the night an thoughts flow through each sector of my membrane
    Thinking of pass events and future greatest which is sometimes one and the same
    Changing route in life due too set backs and growth from youth
    Looking to the stars and making wishes on those which shoots
    Thinking of tomorrow but only having the time to live in today
    Trying to put a plan together for the world still taking recess to play
    As the sun and the moon continue to play hide and seek
    And you sit writing in lifeís book and you story is leaked
    Finding your hitch and the one thing that sets you apart from the whole
    Day dreaming of manifested achievements and goals
    Constantly training your mind for wisdom to arrive and stay
    Making a quest for life long accolades to be hatch and nest
    Fulfilling the purpose of life that burns happiness in our chest
    As we crawl in the morning on all fourís in noon on two feet but we seek more and at night on three gaining wisdom an old age peace bringing brain surfing to godís feet as we reach heavenís beach





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