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    dots Submission Name: Her (The Hood)dots
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    Author: Ghetto_King
    ASL Info:    19 m ft. lauderdale
    Elite Ratio:    0.76 - 4/33/54
    Words: 253
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 728
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1404



    Description:
       the hood as a gurl


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    dotsHer (The Hood)dots
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    I was introduce to her as a child with a blank sheet on life
    In the day very chill but full of life at the sight of night
    Teachings me lifeís doís and donít when mom wasnít home
    Growing in wisdom not age had me feeling Iím grown
    Was as beautiful as the sunset and can make you cry by the sunrise
    Here minstrel cycle painful as the come never a dry eye
    She taught me a G code that was foreign to school
    The survival skills of a hustler without regard for the rules
    Influence my style grammar and the tone of my voice
    Sometimes lead you to jail or a grave and wasnít always your choice
    She has good days and bad days sometimes weeks and months
    Driving everybody crazy so they reach cloud nine by way of a blunt
    Every state a chick like her and cats wanting to stunt
    Got a slew of friends all over from goons to gents
    Old school and new school seem like we repeating this ish
    Leave brand on everybody she touch like the mark of you birth
    She always been same since you meet her like a song lyric or verse
    Never forget from which came so in my thoughts she the first
    I love her for the good times and the bad so I take her for better or worse
    For every hood around the world just a salute too her worth











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    ||| Comments |||
      It is good personification. I'm not certain whether some of the grammar mistakes were intentional or not. Missing Ss here and there, some missing verbs, etc. If so, I'm not sure it was the best way to get your point across, about how she makes her mark on you.

    I can't find a rhythm or anything for this song. Maybe it's just, and maybe it's just late, but I read it three or four times, and I can't find one.

    other than those things, it a very sound piece. keep it up

    Wishing for more'
    ~Brian
    | Posted on 2008-08-14 00:00:00 | by Imadjinn | [ Reply to This ]
      i love your metaphor and personification.
    the hood would certainly be a beautiful woman
    and loyal.
    | Posted on 2008-08-05 00:00:00 | by LovelyGoddess | [ Reply to This ]


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