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    dots Submission Name: Runawaydots
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    Author: twistedchick
    ASL Info:    17/girlie/United Kingdom
    Elite Ratio:    1.89 - 14/39/52
    Words: 134
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 54
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 711



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    dotsRunawaydots
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    I wasn’t a planned baby that I know
    I got no real siblings, no one to call brother or sister
    I am alone on family
    Cause my papa ran out on me, boy I must of messed his life up big time
    My mama thinks I’m just another waste of space
    I’m treated like crap
    So if I run away,
    How long will it take them to notice that I’m gone?
    Still to young to be treated as an adult
    But to old to believe in such things
    I just want to run away
    I’ve got nowhere to go, but I aint going back home
    I know I’ll never be your perfect girl
    I know I was a mistake
    This life makes no sense to me
    I just want to run faraway.




    Submitted on 2008-08-04 18:04:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I used to feel this way when I was a lot younger, but I've since grown from then. I don't think anybody should consider themselves a waste of space, let's put it this way, you're here so make the most of it :)

    You may never be the 'perfect' girl in the eyes of others, but you can be the perfect girl that YOU want to be.

    I'm sorry that I haven't commented on your writing, however I just felt that it was the content that was more important for me to comment on.

    Take care,

    Helena
    | Posted on 2008-08-04 00:00:00 | by Krypton3 | [ Reply to This ]


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