Therein lies Freedom by Porcelaine

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Author:	Porcelaine
ASL Info:	22/F/Croatia
Elite Ratio:	3.9 - 872/686/249
Words:	119

Class/Type:	Poetry/Trapped
Total Views:	309
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
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Therein lies Freedom dots

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The strong and the weak,
The wild and the meek -
We are, my carnivorous trinkets,
Disaster at it's peek.

The more - the merrier
And higher the barrier
To a one exit freedom escape
Where the world seems scarier.

Darker and ghostly,
Temptation – mostly
And filled with all those tears you've forgotten
That made it so costly.

But the freedom is now,
The question is: how
To ready your hearts
For no masters to bow

And live as you dream it – with nothing to vow?

The strong and the weak,
The wild and the meek -
We are, my carnivorous trinkets,
Disaster at it's peek.

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  This is an excellent philisophical poem, which I interpret to mean that there is no freedom without risk! And, taking that risk is risking disaster as a consequence. It brings to mind the phrase "at what price freedom"?

Excellent write, lovely lady! Bravo!

I have made a living for many years as a self-employed businessman owning my own small business. The risk inherent with self-employment is a constant thing, and during hard or slow times, one is tempted to take the easy way and go back to salaried employment.

One small correction; peek is correctly spelled peak (if the meaning is top or summit).
| Posted on 2008-09-27 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
  This is a lovely and most stirring poem! It recalled to my mind one of my favorite poems,
"Dream Pedlary" by Thomas Lovell Beddoes. Though the two poems are different in form there is some mystical connection. A fine, fine, poem! bravo... michael http://oldpoetry.com scam/opoem/5573-Thomas-Lovell-Beddoes-Dream-Pedlary

| Posted on 2008-09-10 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
  Delicious! The rhyme is enchanting, tho' agressive 'here and there'... I felt some passion within the poem, that kind of passion that is every day reduced to silence and can find only in poetry... expression.

"And filled with all those tears you've forgotten
That made it so costly."

... is indeed, as 'said' before, delicios... one can almost float in the weird universe that the lines create.

Another piece of art, from a piece of heart. :)

| Posted on 2008-08-06 00:00:00 | by -Lith-Ium- | [ Reply to This ]
  really loved it...good choice of topic and good choice of words!

i really really loved the whole theme of the poetry....FREEDOM...

my fav lines:

1) "And filled with all those tears you've 4gotten
That made it so costly.

2)To a one exit freedom escape
Where the world seems scarier.

keep it up girl...

| Posted on 2008-08-05 00:00:00 | by obaid | [ Reply to This ]

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