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    dots Submission Name: The Bathroom Floordots
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    Author: BrokenAngelKat
    ASL Info:    18-F-NC
    Elite Ratio:    1.67 - 102/231/186
    Words: 207
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 42
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1472



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    dotsThe Bathroom Floordots
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    Her breathing is shallow
    And her heartbeat is fast..
    And she's laying on the bathroom floor.

    There are tears in her eyes
    And a cry in her throat..
    And she's laying on the bathroom floor.

    Her hair is damp
    And the towel under her is soaked..
    And she's laying on the bathroom floor.

    There's a phone in her hand
    And she's dialing for help..
    And she's laying on the bathroom floor.

    ~*~

    Slowly
    She picks herself up..
    And screams as the pain rips her apart..

    Slowly
    She dries herself off..
    And tries to breathe as her world starts to spin..

    Slowly
    She crawls into the living room
    And collapses on the couch as her stomach turns over..

    Her mother is frantic.
    Her father is calm.
    Her stepmother is rushing..

    At the Urgent Care Center they take her right away..
    In the lobby her stepmother opts to stay..
    After needles and cups and an EKG..
    They tell her "there's something you need to see"

    They show her results..
    Of an infection.
    But her heart is fine..
    Nothing negative to their detection..

    She goes home..
    Collapses in bed..

    Closes her eyes..

    And remembers the bathroom floor..




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    ||| Comments |||
      Beautiful write.
    Honestly.
    Very Descriptive, I can see
    everything in my minds eye.

    Been through the same myself.
    Good to know I wasn't alone.

    I'm sure many will feel the same
    about your poem.
    | Posted on 2008-08-05 00:00:00 | by LovelyGoddess | [ Reply to This ]



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