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    dots Submission Name: Less Messesdots
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    Author: Runningboard
    ASL Info:    25/m/LA
    Elite Ratio:    0.93 - 0/0/2
    Words: 119
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    "and we STILL do not exist"

    continues to faithfully insist

    alas my captain still casting mirrors at you oh Lord.


    Putting sailor's eye to scope

    scratched lens bends view all hope

    this is a reinterpretation of past precedence.


    First mate plank for making eyes

    at the last mate boat-men's wives

    not blown twas paper thrown leaving bay at half-full day.


    Born heir,

    You're MORELESS the librarian and secretary's son.

    Baptized back on land, siding cross-sail sans with gold-spoon sand.

    Captain I see no Lord, except "oh God I do exist."




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