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    dots Submission Name: A Walk, and The Truthdots
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    Author: Old
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    Words: 158
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
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    "In the beginning, the universe was created. This made a lot of people very angry and has been widely regarded as a bad idea."
    -Douglas Noel Adams

    After one dies
    they are to be eaten,
    shat back out,
    and burned.

    The leech-field
    of human life is full
    of deception and
    dishonor, but baby

    I'll never lie to you.

    Even as the clove
    -scented blood rolls
    down your face, I
    am imposing.

    Humans were born
    of rotting animal remains,
    bloody tampons, and
    the excrement of many.

    I'll never lie to you, baby.
    I hate you and want you dead.
    I can't lie.
    baby, I kill everything.

    as the disgust rises
    I see nothing but torpor
    for you, and for life.
    Everything disgusts me.

    It's worthless. It's nothing.
    baby, we were nothing.
    baby, you are nothing.
    the truth is, baby
    it's not just you.

    I kill everything I fuck.




    Submitted on 2008-08-05 17:54:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Well now. Ummm I would be lying if I didn't say that was the most disturbing thing I think I've ever read. But the imagery was pretty gruesome and well...it sounded more like a cutter on steroids than poetry but i guess for the sake of art I'll say that it was a very...Nice...poem.

    Interesting ideas. It's very dark and brooding, it brought me down fairly quickly and I was disgusted. I'm not sure what your intention was nor your inspiration but all I can say is that I'd never want to be your girlfriend. Hahaha. It was dark. But very...clever.
    | Posted on 2008-08-07 00:00:00 | by Hyperbolypses | [ Reply to This ]


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