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    dots Submission Name: Fluiddots
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    Author: MC white
    ASL Info:    20/Male/Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    3.26 - 71/73/45
    Words: 126
    Class/Type: Misc/Sorry
    Total Views: 622
    Average Vote:    3.0000
    Bytes: 781



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    dotsFluiddots
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    I'm fluid and knew it
    since I was a young boy dancin'
    just a brand new product
    of my parents romancin'
    but that same romancing
    turned me on my ear
    and now my girls can't get close to me
    because I have this fear
    of their female while's
    leavin me in denial
    so I hide like a child
    when they ask me to smile
    I'm so insecure
    that in my dreams they combine
    every girl, every face, every moment in time
    Every love I express gets thrown back in my face
    not in reality but in my mind, this is solely the case
    so I apologize to you if
    I leave you grasping
    at straws for my affection
    its just my personalities clashing.




    Submitted on 2008-08-05 18:14:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      truth, been there buddy. been there. amen
    | Posted on 2008-08-29 00:00:00 | by AeThe Lost Poet | [ Reply to This ]


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