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    dots Submission Name: for he who shall remain namelessdots
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    Author: was_i_ever_real
    ASL Info:    23 _ f _ tx
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 194/91/52
    Words: 155
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 762
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    Description:
       sighs...

    all you ever have are sighs.


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    dotsfor he who shall remain namelessdots
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    i've spent my life in heartache
    always lookin for that next one
    to not make me feel...
    like me.
    love! what a siren she is.
    so elusive. enticing.
    disgusting.
    i never feel so bad
    as i do after love.
    it's the reason we die, you know.

    too much of a good thing...
    you know how it goes.

    freckles and faint scars
    i want to kiss your forehead
    tell you it'll be ok
    but that monster's at the door
    dressed so sweet
    red lipstick on her cigarette butt
    and bare feet.
    and you've already unlocked it
    and forgotten me.

    that whore!ible scent
    takes you way back when.
    your first love...
    deceit
    she's perfect for you?
    so where does that leave me?

    one night stands won't satisfy
    forever
    and i never thought i'd say this but
    even after all of them,
    for me,
    it was only you.
    it was always. only. you.




    Submitted on 2008-08-05 21:58:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow, that really kinda made me stop and just think bout idk everything i guess. lol. one of those that you dont know what to say to. i like it
    | Posted on 2010-02-09 00:00:00 | by zercool13 | [ Reply to This ]
      "Whore!ible"

    Wow. That's cool.
    | Posted on 2008-12-12 00:00:00 | by dismal_s child | [ Reply to This ]
      First off, I agree with your description. Love does leave you with a lot of sighs, love sighs and sad sighs.

    As for your poem, I found it to be quite creative and interesting. There was a lot going on, a lot of description but it all worked in the end. There's an obvious story behing this poem and after reading it, it makes you wonder what happened, what deeper meanings are hidden between each line.

    My only suggestion would be maybe adding a few more lines or another verse or two and allow the reader in on the secret of the origin of this poem. but either than that I think this poem was really good. great job
    | Posted on 2008-08-19 00:00:00 | by jaramae | [ Reply to This ]


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