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Author: MC white
ASL Info:    20/Male/Ohio
Elite Ratio:    3.26 - 71 /73 /45
Words: 73
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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A part in a quartet
was offered to me
by a girl who's whiles
do something to me.
And those whiles are pulling
down onto me
like gallons in a bucket
hanging onerously

But I've resolved
and Dissolved
the old part of me

The side which
with the right bitch
my cause me to cheat

So I stay strong
and Wait long
To see you again

Submitted on 2008-08-06 08:15:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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