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    dots Submission Name: Eyesdots
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    Author: Swimming Bird
    ASL Info:    31/m/AR
    Elite Ratio:    5.36 - 92/90/27
    Words: 129
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       Still not completely satisfied with it. But can't think of anything else.


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    dotsEyesdots
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    Our eyes see and hear all that happens,
    They record it for further use.
    From watching a child be born to this world,
    To witness a form of abuse.

    Our glassy marbles that hold in the sea,
    We take them for granted too often.
    They can speak volumes with a glance or a wink,
    And make even frigid hearts soften.

    They are beautiful jewels that sparkle and shine.
    More precious than all the world's gold.
    And if you peer harder they become window panes,
    Which reveal the true depths of their soul.

    They show more emotion than the rest of our bodies
    So when next someone tells you "Hello",
    If you truly desire to know how they're feeling
    Just look in their eyes and you'll know.




    Submitted on 2008-08-06 14:10:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is exactly my view! And a great poem. So true. This is beautifully written. I don't know what else to say. I just really like it.

    --Oli
    | Posted on 2008-09-05 00:00:00 | by Oli | [ Reply to This ]
      You finished it!! And of course it is another great write.
    Its so true too. Eyes are definelty the most valued part of us. I shows what we cannot hide even if we want to.

    I love the last stanza:
    ""They show more emotion than the rest of our bodies
    So when next someone tells you "Hello",
    If you truly desire to know how they're feeling
    Just look in their eyes and you'll know.""
    So very very true.

    Great write. Looking forward to your more to come. :)
    | Posted on 2008-08-20 00:00:00 | by dreamer37517 | [ Reply to This ]
      Ok I see a little bit....the more times I read it the more I see in it and the more I like it...maybe I am just slow...:P
    <3
    | Posted on 2008-08-08 00:00:00 | by blankscreen | [ Reply to This ]
      :)
    I'm not exactly sure where the inspiration came from. But I like it nonetheless.

    Love you.

    <3 Flora
    | Posted on 2008-08-08 00:00:00 | by blankscreen | [ Reply to This ]


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